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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

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nowadays we can see many
people
 who want to have
children
 later in life, they want to enjoy life, they long to travel with their husbands, to spend more time with their husbands after that think about
children
.
Usually
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 Asian
people
 do not think so, they get married when they are younger and after ,marriage they are getting pregnant, majority of cases when
people
 do not want to have
children
 early
it
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is happening in Europe.
Personally
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 I do not suppose that it is a trend, I reckon that they just want to live as they want to do. on the one
hand
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 that decision can have a bad influence on the family,
personally
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 I know one family who used to love each other very much
however
 they did not want to have a child. years later they started
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and
fight
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 and they decided to divorce,
moreover
 having no child can be bad for a country which
have
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 a small population.
on the other
hand
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 I used to be closed with one person who did not desire to have
children
 early, his wife agreed and now they do not own any child,
however
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 they are so delighted now, and they do not regret that decision.
Therefore
 I believe that they should do as they want to do, they should not listen to anyone, and I am sure they will be happy without question. in
conclusion
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 even though some
people
 long to have
children
 later, that does not influence their lives
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