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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme
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This
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 chart shows the percentage of monthly spending in
France
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, Germany, the UK, Turkey, and Spain.
Overall
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, the figure
of
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 clothing was the lowest between
food
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 and drink, housing, and
entertainment
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.
In contrast
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,
food
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 and beverage and housing were the highest percentages.
Whereas
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France
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, Germany, and the UK generally spend on housing, Turkey and Spain spend on
food
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 and drinks. Looking at the table more closely,
it is clear that
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 the portion of clothing, which is 7%, nearly doubled to
entertainment
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 at 13% in
France
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. The percentage of
entertainment
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 in
France
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 was almost the same
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the clothing in German, which is 15%. The interesting thing is that the percentage of clothing and
entertainment
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 is 11% and these are exactly the same figure given in that table. The rate of
Food
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 and drink in Spain and the portion of
housing
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the housing
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 in
France
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 is
also
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 the same at 31%. The figure
of
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for
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entertainment
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 in Turkey
was
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more than tripled in
food
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 and beverage.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, food, entertainment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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