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Ensuring that regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lesson as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree?

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Physical exercises are very crucial to keeping our body healthy.
However
,some people claim that exercise on daily basis should be under the control of parents and
thus
 institutes should not misuse
schools
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 important time having
sports
 teaching as a part of the syllabus.I completely disagree with the notion. To commence with why it is important for us to have
sports
 in
school
 since outdoor physical activities have a plethora of benefits.
Firstly
,during play with friends helps to boost the tendency of students in order to socialize with other people so they have a good tendency to make friends in future.
secondly
,physical exercise not only keeps the body fit but
also
 benefits increasing the immunity power to fight against different diseases.
Although
 parents should teach their infants regards to the importance of physical exercise, a
school
 should play a vital role because the institute is a place which provides the platform for children to enhance their skills towards a particular game like badminton,cricket and football.if teacher promotes student in
sports
 they become a good player and may represent their
school
 at the national level .
in addition
 if a children effort they have a chance to play for India and it will be a very proudful situation for the university in that movement.
for example
 many international players like virat kholi started their carrier of cricket from
school
 level. In conclusion,
according to
 ,
sports
 activities at
school
 have a
tremendous
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 positive development and
thus
 they should not be restricted anymore.
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