In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What are the reasons for this? What in your opinion can be done about it?

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unemployment among
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qualified
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has
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increased
in numerous counties of the world.Unbalanced economic
policy
and the lack of skill
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can be the two main
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why the graduates are not in
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.The main
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policy
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by the nations is
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irrational
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.Most of the young qualified are not showing their interest
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other jobs
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on
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agriculture
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sector
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includes
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colour
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like
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or clerical
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.there should be 20%
people
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should depend on
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business
.10 %
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shold
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on education and 10%
people
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should be ready for
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administrative
job
which is a healthy sign of
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policy
.The Government is
faill
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failing
to
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adopt
it. The Graduates who are expertise in agriculture are not showing their interest in the agriculture
sector
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plumber
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,
electrician
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,
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locksmith
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in
different
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area
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the skilled workers should show their interest
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as a result
there will be
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production in every area of the human needs.
instead
of
dedending
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defending
depending
in one
sector
, the workforce should be
devided
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divided
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other sectors.If
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educated
peope
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people
will work
on
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the neglected area there will be gross profit in every
sector
. In conclusion,no
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doubt
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the Goverment
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Goverment
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governments
of many counties putting their effort to overcome
unemployment
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the unemployment
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problem
,In my
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the balance
econimic
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economic
economics
polocy
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policy
should be
attopted
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adopted
attempted
to
over
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overcome
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come
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this
problem
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