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Since the 18th Century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the fast-paced era, technology is proliferating regularly.
Due to
this
, the majority of individuals are jobless. I totally agree with
this
 given statement and
this
 essay will discuss the reasons behind my agreement with an example in upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, modern technology has replaced manpower with machine power. In the past time, people do tasks with their own efforts and hard trial because they did not know about digitalization;
however
, nowadays, most companies are using electronic gadgets for their industry
such
 as robots as it works faster as compared to humans.
Consequently
, it puts a negative influence on employment.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Harward university revealed that Amazon Canada has reduced their number of employees because they are packaging with the assistance of robots.
Hence
, it is increasing unemployment continuously.
Secondly
, automation could work efficiently and accurately,
whereas
 personnel might do errors
while
 doing efforts,
moreover
, mankind has feelings
such
 as stress,over-excitement and many more. They may be less efficient in their work.
Furthermore
, within a little amount of time, machines may produce more and it may reduce labour costs. A Company may hire the wrong person who is not suited for that particular job and one may destroy their efforts.
To conclude
,
although
 top-level employees and companies are benefiting from the latest technology and it brings a comfortable working environment , it does need directions from human beings to operate,
moreover
, without people , machines can not work.
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