The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members  across the faculties of a major university in 2012

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of employees by their sex for various fields of the university in the specific year.
Overall
, we can see from the graph that the biggest difference in the percentage of
men
and women members is in
the
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engineering with the domination of males
while
in education there is the opposite situation with the majority of females. The vast percentage of
men
is in the engineering path 85 %
whereas
there is only 18 per
cent
of women. There are only two fields where the proportion of female academic staff members is higher than
men
ones, the first one is art with 58 per
cent
of women and 42 % of
men
and in
education
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there is 72 % of female employees and only 38 per
cent
males. Equality accounted
only
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in medicine with approximately 50 to 50 per
cent
. In science, business and law the male figures are overweight the females and are estimated at about 60 %, respectively.
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