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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts below illustrate the
production
 of several types of power sources
such
 as coal, gas,
petro
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petrol
, nuclear, and other in
France
during
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 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, gas and coal are the most kinds of energy that
France
 produced in both years.
However
, nuclear power and other types are the lowest in the two years. Gas
production
 had slightly rose in 2005
with
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 30.31%
compare
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 to 1995 was 29.63%,
as well as
 coal increased from 29.80 per
cent
 to 30.93 per
cent
 in 2005.
In addition
, oil
production
 was around 29.27%
of
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in 1995
were
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it shows a deployed to 19.55% in 2005.
Furthermore
, nuclear usage went up in
France
were
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where
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 it was 6.40
per
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cent
 in 1995, and in 2005 4% increased where it
reach
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to
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10.10%. Other sources of energy produced more in 2005 were it used to be near to 5 per
cent
 of
France
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France's
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production
, and in 2005 it took 9.10% of the
country
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country's
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production
.
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