The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate how Grange
Park
has developed over a period of 103 years. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the area witnessed dramatic changes with regard to the construction o new facilities, the building of a new amphitheatre, and the relocation of a
rose
garden
and seats. In 1920, there was a
stage
for musicians to the west of the
park
and 2
rose
gardens were located south and north sides of the
stage
. Another
rose
garden
was placed to the northeast of the site. In the middle of the
park
, a fountain was placed. There was a pond on the upper east side and a glasshouse on the lower east side. Over the course of the given period, the
stage
was replaced with an amphitheatre for concerts and the
rose
garden
which was to the south of the
stage
in 1920 was relocated into the middle of the
park
. The glasshouse was demolished and a water feature was constructed
instead
.
Moreover
, the pond and the
rose
garden
which were in the north-east previously were knocked down and a café and children’s play area were built in that space.
Finally
, the location
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, rose, garden, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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