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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation In England and Wales between and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation In England and Wales between and 2011.
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The line graph gives information
abaut
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about
 the consumption of fish and
same
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the same
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diffrent
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different
 kinds of meat in
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Evropen
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European
 country between 1979 and 2004.
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,
it is clear that
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 the
consuption
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consumption
 of beef and lamb in the
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country
 illustrated a significant downward trend over the period shown.
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, the same figures for
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chicken
 and fish followed different patterns. A
dramamatically
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dramatically
grammatically
fluctuation the people of the country started eating less beef and lamb from 1997
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 2004.
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 a moderate rise from well over 200 to
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araund
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around
 240 in the first 5 years, the amount of weekly eaten beef per
persondeclined
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person declined
person-declined
 dramatically to reach its low of
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araund
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around
 100 in 2004.
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However
, the same indication for lamb experienced a steady fall from
itsinitial
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its initial
 150 to just over 50 in the final year. In
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straw
 contrast, starting at
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araund
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around
 150, the figure for
chiken
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chicken
 intake went up sharply by
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araund
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around
 100 grams to reach a peak when the period ended.
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, there was a stagnation
at
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 approximately 50 in the quantity of fish
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consumed
 per person per week in
this
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Vocabulary: Replace the words araund with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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