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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The line graph shows the
level
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 of acid in the mouth after consuming
fruit
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sugar
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,
cane
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sugar
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 and
honey
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 and the possible occurrence of tooth decay. The acid levels are measured by
pH
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 values and the longevity by minutes.
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, among the three sweetening agents, it can be observed that
Cane
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sugar
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 is likely the most damaging with the highest threat than
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Fruit
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sugar
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 and
Honey
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.
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, the longer the
pH
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level
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 remains low, the higher the chance is for the development of tooth decay. In detail, the mouth
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 has a
pH
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level
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 of 7, which significantly drops after eating sweet foods. When eating sweet products like
cane
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sugar
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, the
pH
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level
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 falls to 3.5, which is at a
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 where tooth decay is very probable and continues to be detrimental for over half an hour.
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 is followed by the consumption of
fruit
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sugar
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 and
honey
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 in which, when the acidity drops to a
pH
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level
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 of 4 and a
pH
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level
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 of below 5 respectively, both remain susceptible to the decaying of teeth for not more than 20 minutes after the eating time.
Honey
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, in comparison, to
fruit
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 and
cane
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sugar
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, has the lowest risk when eaten
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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