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Task1; The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Task1; The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of using
water
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 for three different purposes in North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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.
Overall
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, most of the areas
use
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water
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 in agriculture,
whereas
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 both
Europe
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 and
America
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 have the most
water
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 consumption in the industrial field. In detail, agricultural
use
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 of
water
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 registered the highest rate in South
America
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,Africa, Central
Asia
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 and East
Asia
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 the percentage that ranged between 71% to 88% of the total consumption.
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, the data in
Europe
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 and
America
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 showed a slight decline in that purpose in
Europe
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 and
America
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 where it is considered to be the second high usage in demand.
However
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, industrial
water
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use
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 was the top in
Europe
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 and
America
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 which registered 53% and 48% respectively. The percentage of the other areas did not exceed 12&.
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, the proportion of domestic
use
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 is considered insufficient, especially in
Asia
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 with only 7% and Africa with 9%. The figure for
this
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 consumption experienced the highest
water
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use
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 at homes in South
America
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 with 19& and in
Europe
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 at 15&
as well as
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 13% in North
America
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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