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Some people think the government should establish free libraries in each town. Other believe that it is a waste of money since people can access the Internet to obtain information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people suggest that the government should build free
libraries
 in each city.other Public think that it is a
wastage
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 of
money
as well as
money
 because nowadays every person
have
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thier
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their
 own mobile phone,
computer
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and computer
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 they can collect
every
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all
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 information from
internet
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the internet
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due to
advance
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technology
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in technology
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.
i
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I
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 will discuss more in
further
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the further
a further
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 essay. I am agreed with those people who
says
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say
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 that
creates
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creating
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a
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a library
libraries
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libraries
 in each town
it
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is
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 just
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a wastage
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wastage
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waste
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 of time and
money
 because nowadays
due to
advance
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advanced
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 technology everybody can easily find everything that they need with the help of android, computer and laptop in the form of pdf and they can read
comfortable
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comfortably
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 when they wish they can read in the soft form.
Secondly
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 those peoples who
says
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say
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government
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the government
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 should have to
to
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apply
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established free
libraries
 in my point of view
they
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apply
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are good thinking but it's just
wastage
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a wastage
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 of
money
 nothing else because nowadays every person has busy
on
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with
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 their work and they couldn't give the time to go
library
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the library
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 and gain some knowledge
....
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...
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 In conclusion,
i
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I
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 think
established
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establishing
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a
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a library
libraries
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libraries
 in each town is just a
wastage
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waste
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 of time and
money
 nothing more because nowadays
facilities
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the facilities
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 of
Internet
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the Internet
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is
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are
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 spread more people need everything in just a single click and they find
very
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it very
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quick
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quickly
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.
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