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nternational community should act immediately to encourage countries to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels, such as oil and gas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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International society should quickly encourage people to minimize the purpose of fossil materials
for example
 coal and gas. I am of the strong opinion that the usage of
this
 ,fossil food will lead to global issues.
firstly
, fossil fuels are
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non-renewable
resources
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, the more humanity is burned now , the fewer materials in the future , human beings can operate other energy sources solar power wind power and hydro energy. Other energy power is cheap and eco-friendly. For ,instance solar panels don`t require special care and they are durable.
Moreover
, the consumption of fossil electricity produces wind pollution. factories that value fossil electricity release a lot of carbon dioxide clouds into the breeze. people do not think about the fact that
this
 greatly reduces breeze quality.
for example
,
due to
 factories that need fossil ammunition and are located near the city, people fall ill with serious diseases. In ,
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conclusion I believe that the international community need to minimize the adoption of fossil materials. Because human beings can be used other vitality sources they are more eco-friendly
also
 the practice of fossil food leads to atmospheric pollution.
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