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The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart shows how much time is spent by people in England using different categories of telefon from 1995 till 2002.
Overall
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 it can be seen that cellular telephones were used more often throughout the shown period. Lined gadgets scored the highest amount of
minutes
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 for local calls
as well as
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 international calls.
However
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, domestic telefon usage was more than other types reaching its peak in 1998 and 1999 at numbers approaching 90 billion
minutes
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,
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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 international telephoning showed a steady increase through the illustrated years reaching an amount near those of local calls with 60 billion
minutes
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in
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apply
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2002. Mobile calls were not often used at the beginning of 1995.
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 trend changed dramatically with a sharp increase in call
minutes
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 reaching nearly 45 billion in the year 2002.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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