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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the amount of fish,
chicken
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,
beef
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 and
lamb
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 people in a European country consumed weekly per
person
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 over a period of 25 years. From 1979 to 2004, the
consumption
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 of fish in
this
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 European country had always been far less than
meat
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 with a steady amount of approximately 50
grammes
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 per
week
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 per
person
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. As for the trends of
meat
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consumption
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,
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chicken
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the chicken
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 had risen to become the most-eaten
meat
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 in the year 2004 compared with the gradual decrease of
beef
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 and
lamb
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. Despite a small spike appeared in 1984
beef
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consumption
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, the line illustrates a general downward trend, making it the second most eaten
meat
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 in the year 2004
whereas
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beef
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 was the most consumed
meat
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 per
week
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 dropping from around 225 grams to 100 grams per
person
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, showing a decrease of 125 grams for these 25 years. People in
this
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 European country ate roughly 150
grammes
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 of
chicken
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 or
lamb
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 per
week
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 /per
person
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 in 1979.
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, 25 years after 1979, the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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 rose significantly to around 250
grammes
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 per
week
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while
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 the amount of
lamb
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 consumed dropped to a little higher than 50
grammes
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 weekly. The opposite trend between
chicken
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 and
lamb
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consumption
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 eventually made a gap of 100
grammes
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, beef, lamb, person, consumption, meat, grammes, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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