Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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which

students

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have to learn at school. Each subject has

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reason

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why pupils should learn them. Some

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thought

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was one of the most important

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but others emphasized that

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and

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were more important than

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History

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taught

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what they could do to improve themselves, their country, society, industries and so on. Stories of historical figures provided pupils

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ways to achieve their goals, it

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showed them that they were supposed to avoid some

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they could get themselves in

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always gave children

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what to do or what not to do.

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people

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could learn about different cultures through learning

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, it

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gave

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different angles to see the world.

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learnt how the world works from

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and

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. Children could gain knowledge of our environment

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learning chemistry, physics, and biology.

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could invent new products which provided

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more convenient life through

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learning

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and

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students

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could train their logical thinking.

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ability helped

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problems. I personally believe that all the

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school are important.

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taught me who I am, what is my culture and how can I be a better person.

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and

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gave me

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to solve problems

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my daily life. I cannot live my life without one of those

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essential knowledge that pupils should gain

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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