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Writing task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Today family members do not eat meals together. Why does this happen? Is this a positive or negative development Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In the past times, all family members used to have meals and breakfast together to have a conversation about what has happened in a day. But in the present
time
, somehow
this
 situation has
been
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changed because of
this
 technology and busy life.
This
 essay will elaborate on why
this
 is happening and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 valuable topic that why
this
 is a negative
development
. One of the main reasons
of
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 eating fewer meals together as a family is
the
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technology and
busy
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 life. To clarify
this
, everyone has now smartphones, the laptops and they just spend almost
time
 on
this
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 accessories. Sometimes an individual eats meals in their room only because they are either working late or coming home from office in the late at night.
For example
: in the past years, working hours
was
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 only 8 hours now working professionals spend almost half of their day in the office. Every person is now focusing to be financially independent to give their families a good bread-butter.
However
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this
 is a sign of negative
development
 in the family.
This
 negative
development
 sometimes leads to isolation or depression as members of the family doesn’t have
time
 to talk about each other’s problem. Previously at the dinner table, everyone would discuss or share their problems.
Now
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this
 has totally changed because of
this
 social media and growing technology.In order to avoid
this
 one should have at least one meal together in a day. So that it will keep their mind fresh and will help to grow their bond as a family. In conclusion, I can say
this
 is a really negative
development
,
while
 everyone is running to earn more money to have a luxurious lifestyle but in some
way
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 they are missing their precious
time
 with their family which was used to give them happiness. In my opinion, because of
this
 people are having negative effects on their health
due to
 less socializing.
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