Some people believe that the activity of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economy of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Although
, that some people think that most developing countries are being benefited
by
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multinational
corporations
, others are taking the opposite
side
and believe that big multinational
corporations
are putting
in
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others in
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danger
economy
's
country
. In my opinion, I consider that big
corporations
are harmful to the
economy
of developing countries and
also
believe that local economies are affected. On one hand, there are many people who think that big companies aim against the
economy
of developing countries and I agree.
In other words
, big
corporations
have only one goal which is to make as much money as they can
destroy
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all the competition around because they have more economic resources to do it.
For example
, big chains of supermarkets can drop
prices
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the prices
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of some products losing a minimum amount of money but attracting more customers that will expend more later on.
While
small businesses
such
as a local market cannot do that because of the tiny volume of sales. As consequence, the local
economy
is affected.
On the other hand
, the other
side
believe
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that it is beneficial for the
country
's
economy
because big companies pay a huge amount of tax which later on
what
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apply
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will be reflected in the
country
as a public infrastructure
such
are schools, hospitals and the improvement of the roads.
Furthermore
, it is a big source of employment where the entire population is
benefited
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from being part of the workforce. A clear example that happened in my city with the arrival of Billagong's factories where hundreds of unemployed people found a job.
Consequently
, it is helping the local
economy
move forward.
To conclude
, there is a
side
of the population who believe that big
corporations
strengthen the
country
's
economy
by paying taxes and employing their
habitants
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habitats
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.
While
the other
side
believe
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the opposite where big
corporations
are destroying the
economy
bringing more competitive prices and affecting small businesses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job creation
  • Technology transfer
  • Economic growth
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Exploitation of labor
  • Unfair labor practices
  • Working conditions
  • Job security
  • Environmental degradation
  • Pollution
  • Deforestation
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Erosion of local cultures
  • Balance and regulation
  • Host countries
  • Implement policies
  • Mitigate negative impacts
  • Enforcing labor laws
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