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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in Uk from 2001 to 2008

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in Uk from 2001 to 2008
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
men
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,
women
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 and
children
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 who consumed five types of fruits and vegetables each day in the Uk between 2001 and 2008 .
Overall
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, the percentage of
women
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were
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at
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 the highest position,
on the other hand
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 ,
children
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 were
at
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 the least position.
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, the figure for
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 increased gradually less than
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women
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for women
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. There was a significant increase in
the
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women
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number of women
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 from 2001 to 2005 at around 20% and 25%,
while
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 the figure for
children
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 remained stable
on
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in
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 those years
to
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 10% . The number of
women
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 had a dramatic rise over the three years between 2004 and 2006 at just over 25% and 30%. But
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children
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the children
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 increased moderately to 20% and 25%. In 2007 and 2008
women
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's statistics decreased slowly
at
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to
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 almost 30% and
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children
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children's
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 statistics rose slightly to just below 30%. The percentage of
men
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 stayed unchanged at over 15% between 2001 and 2003. In 2006, it rose
at
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 around 25%. The figure for
men
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 decreased
at
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in
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last
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the last
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 two years
at
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 under 30%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant fluctuation
  • Dietary habits
  • Public health campaign
  • Demographic breakdown
  • Socio-economic status
  • Predictive suggestions
  • Consumption rates
  • Dietary guidelines
  • Technological advancements
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