Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the popularity and rapid development of the Internet, a variety of
office
software is more and more convenient,
more
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and more
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and more
work
can be done without the need
in
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the
office
. But is it really the case? How much more productive will it be to
work
from
home
? How much easier will it be to communicate with colleagues? In recent years, technology has gradually been fully popularized among
people
.
People
can almost complete the
work
content on their mobile phones, which can
also
greatly save a lot of
time
and free
time
to do other things. But being at
home
, after all, can let
people
have a sense of relaxation,
efficiency
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and efficiency
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will be greatly reduced. Many tasks that require communication cannot be solved in a timely manner. Nor does holding an emergency meeting ensure that everyone can attend. Working in an
office
is no different from studying in school, we need to study in school
,
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because we know that we can't concentrate at
home
, so working in an
office
is very necessary. It is more convenient to communicate with colleagues and leaders and make
work
handover in
time
, so as to avoid wasting
time
and causing some mistakes. Everyone
at
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work
when they dare not
lazy
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be lazy
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,
this
is the importance of the environment, can greatly improve the efficiency of
work
. In conclusion,
work
efficiency is often determined by the environment, working at
home
is easy to relax
yourself
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,
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and reduce
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reduce
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reduces
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productivity.
On the contrary
, when you see
people
working hard in the
office
, that itself will be driven by the environment, so working in the
office
is more efficient than working at
home
.
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