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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the popularity and rapid development of the Internet, a variety of
office
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 software is more and more convenient,
more
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 and more
work
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 can be done without the need
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 the
office
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. But is it really the case? How much more productive will it be to
work
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 from
home
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? How much easier will it be to communicate with colleagues? In recent years, technology has gradually been fully popularized among
people
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.
People
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 can almost complete the
work
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 content on their mobile phones, which can
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 greatly save a lot of
time
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 and free
time
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 to do other things. But being at
home
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, after all, can let
people
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 have a sense of relaxation,
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and efficiency
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 will be greatly reduced. Many tasks that require communication cannot be solved in a timely manner. Nor does holding an emergency meeting ensure that everyone can attend. Working in an
office
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 is no different from studying in school, we need to study in school
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 because we know that we can't concentrate at
home
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, so working in an
office
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 is very necessary. It is more convenient to communicate with colleagues and leaders and make
work
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 handover in
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, so as to avoid wasting
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 and causing some mistakes. Everyone
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work
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 when they dare not
lazy
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be lazy
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,
this
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 is the importance of the environment, can greatly improve the efficiency of
work
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. In conclusion,
work
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 efficiency is often determined by the environment, working at
home
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 is easy to relax
yourself
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,
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and reduce
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reduce
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reduces
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 productivity.
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, when you see
people
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 working hard in the
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, that itself will be driven by the environment, so working in the
office
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 is more efficient than working at
home
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.

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