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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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frequency
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the frequency
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 of eating at fast
food
 restaurants among
people
 in the
USA
 from
years
 2003 until
years
 2013.
In there
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 looks that average of
people
 in the
USA
 in
years
 2003
that
is have
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 31% of most
people
 just once a week
frequency
 of eating at fast
food
 restaurant.
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conditions
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 is
same
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with
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average
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an average
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 of most
people
 in the
USA
 in
years
 2006,
that
is have
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 33% of most
people
 just once a week
frequency
 of eating at fast
food
 restaurant. But, that
conditions
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is
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are
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 different
with
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from
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average
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an average
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 of
people
 in the
USA
 in
years
 2013,
that
is have
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has
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 33%
most
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apply
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of
people
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the people
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 just once or twice a month
frequency
 of eating at fast
food
 restaurant. In thorough graph can
concluded
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that
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the
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 average of
people
 in the
USA
 in
years
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the years
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 2003 until 2013 eating at fast
food
 restaurants
for
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apply
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once a week and once or twice a month
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words frequency, food, people, usa, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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