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Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

#people #person #skills #group #activities
Humans are social beings by nature, they require human interactions to build confidence in themselves,
it’s
 the reason why children are encouraged to attend schools and employees
to
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commute to
work
 offices.
Group
activities
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 a great tool to discover strengths and areas of improvement of each participant and to provide feedback. Through these
activities
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 individuals are exposed to
acquire
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 new sets of
skills
such
 as team leadership,
team
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teamwork
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work
 and rapport,
while
 members are encouraged to share ideas and knowledge in a practical way, as participants may stand opposite points of view and possess different types of intelligence. It promotes both
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healthy competition and an opportunity for debate.
Nevertheless
, the line for
group
activities
 must be drawn when groups are big and participants start to rely on other
people
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skills
 and do not feel encouraged to learn that particular set of
skills
 as
it’s
 expected to be another team member’s contribution.
It’s
 best explained when
tasks
 are divided for an easier resolution and participants do not engage with other
member’s
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members’
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tasks
 but only limit themselves to complete theirs and get the
work
 fulfilled. By working alone, humans are forced to complete all
tasks
 and find creative solutions by themselves, they are challenged and feel obligated to learn new
skills
 if required,
such
 as learning
a
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new software, doing all the research
work
, creating action plans, and so on. And other
less mentioned
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skills
such
 as time management and recognizing when to request aid. Positively
group
activities
 are widely accepted as a great method to build intellectual
skills
,
although
 I do consider that effectiveness is only met when teams are reduced to up to 4 members and
tasks
 are shared and request the whole
group
 contribution to be completed, if not,
it’s
 best to keep the
work
 individually.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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