You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You should write at least 150 words.

#goods #shop #town #prices

Dear

Mr.

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Anthony, I am writing

this

letter to let you know that

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I'm

planning to buy at your electrical store some new

bulb

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and

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a chandelier

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chandelier

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to install

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apply

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new

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built house, By the

way

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last

week,

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I'm

the one who buy a washing machine at your store. I saw

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apply

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an advertisement

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social media that

this

bulb is very

cost efficient

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and very good quality, One of my

neighbors

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have

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that bulb already, and

the

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they

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order

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onine

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online

. I want to know if you have the stock of that goods

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so that

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will drop by

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your store to pick

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up next week. Please send me back

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to let me know the price. I want to know how much it will cost

beacuse

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because

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want to buy one dozen of those

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Let me know the price.

This

is my number 0538817200. I look forward to your prompt response. Sincerely, Rubenel Laurino

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7 paragraphs

156 words

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Clear and correct grammar

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