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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You should write at least 150 words.

#goods #shop #town #prices
Dear
Mr.
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 Anthony, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that
im
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I'm
 planning to buy at your electrical store some new
bulb
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bulbs
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 and
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a chandelier
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chandelier
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 to install
it
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at
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 my
new
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 built house, By the
way
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last
 week,
im
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I'm
 the one who buy a washing machine at your store. I saw
it
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in
advertisement
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in
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 social media that
this
 bulb is very
cost efficient
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 and very good quality, One of my
neighbors
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have
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 that bulb already, and
the
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they
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order
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 it
onine
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online
. I want to know if you have the stock of that goods
,
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so that
i
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 will drop by
at
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your store to pick
it
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 up next week. Please send me back
email
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 to let me know the price. I want to know how much it will cost
beacuse
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because
i
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 want to buy one dozen of those
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Let me know the price.
This
 is my number 0538817200. I look forward to your prompt response. Sincerely, Rubenel Laurino
Submitted by rubenellaurino on

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