The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990

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bar chart illustrates the contribution of various factors to the Indian economy between 1950,1970 and 1990. It is clear from the graph that, in 1950 and 1990 the sectors has been fluctuated except in 1970.

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, in 1950 starting with industries which were 20 proportion and slightly increased in 1970.

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it fell from 27 per cent to just under 20 per cent.

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, self-employment climbed dramatically from approximately 7 % to 36 % which was the highest percentage

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to being the most contribution to the economy .

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, the service sector and agriculture had nearly the same ratio in the three years with 26 % being the highest proportion in the service sector and

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, agriculture hit a peak of 35%. In

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we can say that all the features assisted the economy in several ways ,

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, self-employment has been the most helpful.

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The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990

Comleing university education is thought some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people think that advertisements take great effect on the economy, and others think that they excel more in social impact. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that the increasing use of the computers and the mobile phones has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills, TO what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this

Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself.