Nowadays, many people spend less and less time with family. Why is this happening? How does this affect individuals and their families?
In recent years, people have become that they have not allocated
time
to their parents. This
case can be related with
technological development, expanded work spans and generation gaps between family Change preposition
to
members
. This
situation affects individuals negatively because they forget the concept of family and solidarity.
Firstly
, the possible causes
of this
situation are improved technologies, long time
work shifts and significant differences between generations. New technologies such
as smart phones
, computer software and movie applications have led to separation in homes. It was weird that as a technological device, television could attract Correct your spelling
smartphones
members
and it allowed them to make conversation which is essential for sustaining family ties. In these
days, every member of Change preposition
These
family
has preferred to watch movies and play games Add an article
the family
instead
of only
a Add a missing verb
having only
half hour
conversation. Extended work shifts have an important role in terms of decreasing family ties. Family Add a hyphen
half-hour
members
especially parents cannot allocate time
for their children
in comparison to the past and those children
who exposed
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are exposed
from
parents’ interests would become more individual. Change preposition
to
Finally
, generation
gap has been a common problem since the beginning of humanity, Add an article
the generation
however
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,however
last
decades generation spans have shortened
by Add a missing verb
been shortened
the
technology. Correct article usage
apply
Thus
communication between members
has become more and more difficult. As a result
, these three causes
have created Add an article
the problem
a problem
problem
in spending Fix the agreement mistake
problems
time
with family.
Secondly
, these causes
harm families’
and Change preposition
to families’
members
’ relationships. Especially, this
situation is more detrimental for children
because if they lose their emotions about their family, their behaviour and future would change negatively without family memories. Besides
, parents may suffer from their emotions and loneliness in their late ages due to
weak ties between children
. In long
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the long
terms
, each member may experience mental disorders in the future because depriving and exposing Fix the agreement mistake
term
of
many emotions can create depressive manner after many years. In short, harms would magnify Change preposition
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according to
deprivation and identity in long
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the long
terms
.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
term
causes
and effects can be multiplied about
Change preposition
in
this
case. In my opinion, to prevent these bad impacts due to
separation in families, members
should open
to Add a missing verb
be open
understand
them and allocate certain times for conversation.Wrong verb form
understanding
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