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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart given demonstrates the ratio of families in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. All in all, the
households
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 in retained
accommodation
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 gradually went up ,
while
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households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 showed a downward trend. From the figure，we can see clearly that percentage of
households
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in
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owned had a large gap to rented
accommodation
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 in 1918 and it was almost 4 times as big as it in rented
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, at 78% and 22% respectively.In 2001, the ratio of
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in
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owned had reached a peak at approximately 70%.
By contrast
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，the number of families renting
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houses has halved for it in 1918 by only
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31%. It is noticeable that the
households
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 in retained
accommodation
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 showed a modestly upward trend from 21% to 64% between 19198 and 2011.
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, the ratio of families who rented
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accommodation
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 in England and Wales went down moderately from 78% to 36%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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