The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The bar charts illustrate
that
the number of pupils’ UK who got Correct word choice
apply
Correct article usage
a master
master
and PhD Change noun form
master's
degree
worked part-time, Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
Change preposition
for voluntary
voluntary
work, Change the word
voluntarily
further
study
or Add a missing verb
were unemployment
unemployment
in 2008.
Replace the word
unemployed
Overall
, we can see that the
most Correct article usage
apply
students
who got master’s degree
wanted to Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
further
study
. However
, postgraduate students
liked to work part-time and continued their study
.
Almost from Fix the agreement mistake
studies
70,000
Correct article usage
the 70,000
students
who got their master, more than half of them wanted to further
study
and about 21,000 of them preferred to worked
as part-time or Change the verb
work
voluntary
Change the word
voluntarily
which
the ratio of each Correct pronoun usage
apply
were
about 17,735 and 3,500 respectively. Wrong verb form
being
Although
, about 16,000 students
didn’t do anything.
In
postgraduate Change preposition
Of
students
, one-third of them preferred to further
study
and 30% of them, which was about 2,500 students
, worked part-time
Add an article
a part-time
job
and just under 400 pupils did voluntary work. But, about 1,600 pupils were Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
unemployment
.Replace the word
unemployed
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