Many people put their personal information online for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

A plenty
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of individuals put their valuable data on
internet
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the internet
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for various
objective
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opinion, it might be
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beneficial
for people because they can easily do their work by seating at home.Though it has some detrimental
effect
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on our social and personal life. On the one hand,if any person put their personal data on social media or bank it provides him or her
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of facilities.To be precise,now we can communicate with people within
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minute
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and know one another just
seeing
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one profile.
Moreover
,we are able to make more and more friends.
Apart from
this
, people can easily purchase any products
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online via
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cradit
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credit
card,which saves
their
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money.
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, amazon set up a
shope
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shop
shoppe
where is no salesmen
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and everything
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doing by
customer
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the customer
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and
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cut the value from their account.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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