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Production of goods has led to environmental damage. give causes and solution of th eproblem.

#production #goods #damage #eproblem
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In
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 present world, humanity is facing a major concern of environmental damage
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humans
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activites
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activities
 by increasing the amount of production .In
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 essay , I will give brief causes and solutions
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this
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 phenomenon . On one hand ,
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 will explain the impact of
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 production on the environment .
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 , the increasing world population is putting pressure on natural resources
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 as deforestation to exploit wood in the manufacture of wooden furniture ,
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 , we have cut down
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enormous
 areas
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 rainforest.
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, fossil fuels like oil and gas are running out and we are destroying wildlife habitats
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which
lead
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leads
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 to the extinction of many species of animals and plants .Sadly,
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 problem is a result of our consumption culture.
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,
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companies and individuals are willing
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 issue by providing solutions , in order to decrease the impact of damage on the earth .As solutions , governments should introduce
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a law
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law
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 to reduce emissions from factories ,
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 , they could impose
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green taxes
 on companies and promote recycling .
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 , we should use
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the product
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product
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products
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 with less packaging and recycle products as much as possible because
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recycling
 save energy and raw materials
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,
natural
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the natural
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area
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 should be protected . In conclusion , regardless of the huge increase
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 factories and production , it is firmly to preserve our environment ,
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 , the government should be strict , about waste produced by the companies .

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