Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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around the world is education.Meanwhile,some people believe some

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education is

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of learning in different aspects.

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in school learn not only some academic courses but

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relationships and communication abilities.They can learn

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students.

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numerous subjects

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some naughty

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may not pay attention to their main courses.

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should learn enormous capabilities during their childhood because with

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they gain lif-coping skills and just with the cooperation of

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we can gain the desired result.

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