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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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All university
study
subjects
 are debatable. Few people believe that
students
 of all universities should not necessarily
study
 additional
subjects
while
 others do not.
This
 essay will discuss both views of the argument in detail. On the one hand, I agree that
students
 should
study
 whatever they like.
This
 is because it helps scholars to focus a lot of time, and it is disposing of
the
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 better version of
students
.
For instance
, if the graduate's specific
subjects
 are computer technology or mathematics
this
 is required for assert numerous hours to prepare.
Furthermore
, some teachers spontaneously request their homework from
students
.
In particular
 terms of, in my
opinion
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 these studying materials are considering an excessive amount of requirements.
On the other hand
, people regarding that will be useful in all
subjects
 in
their
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 future,
such
 as these are related to technology and science.
However
,
this
 reform originates minor benefits to scholars studying careers.
For example
, science and technology are becoming more controversial in the present times.
This
 is because a majority of people are interested in modern occupations.
In particular
 terms of artificial intelligence, programming and web design. In my opinion, it is first and foremost to simultaneously create
comfortable
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 zones for their
study
, and
afterwards
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 it is disposed to contribute to the enriched countries, and develop their reputation with make a new application like a giant company with
well-paid
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a well-paid
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 salary.
That is
 why
,
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 universities should decrease their lecture hours. All in all, the more
subjects
 are disturbed
at
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by
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 their proposed development. I think universities make comfortable areas and conveniences for
students
 to improve .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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