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Writing Samples
Band 5

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.
This
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 map depicts how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.It clear from the maps that are the coastal town has changs into
modern
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a modern
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city
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According to
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 what is shown on the first map we can see portland in 1950 Grassland covered the most area and just has three buildings in the northwest.on the second map we can see how the
city
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changes
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 to
the
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an
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 urban area in 2007 they build Apartments opposite the sea and around the marina port has new parking next to the Swimming pool and in a down area divided to 4 places for businesses they build two Shops and Cinema and Houses.
To sum up
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,we could say that Portland in 1950 is quite a place and simple to
living
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 in.
While
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 in 2007
city
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 developed into
modern
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a modern
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city
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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