men and women employed in full time jobs should share the responsibility of households chore .do you agree or disagree ? share relevant personal experiences.

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In the contemporary era,
both
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sexes are equal
persent
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per cent
present
in many areas
such
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families
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and
workplace
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workplaces
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.Some traditional
families
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believe
households
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chore
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should be
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women
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women's
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responsibilities even
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if that
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that
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they
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need to work. Other parts have open
mind
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minds
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think
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and think
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that
women
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and men need to share their
reposibilities
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responsibilities
. As
a
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a woman
women
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women
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,I totally agree with
former
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opinion and I will explain with some samples.
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in
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some traditional
families
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still need the younger
women
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to afford
households
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chore
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and some older
one
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ones
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believe
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that is
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treasure
personalities
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of personalities
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form
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from
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girls. They have inherent characteristics
can
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that can
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finish all the
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chore
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perfectly.
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, the world
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significant
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change and
women
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can have outstanding performance in their workplaces. Even some of them still can provide excellent performance than men. In
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households
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household
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chore
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sections,
women
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and men necessarily to corporate.
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, as I
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up in
an
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trantional
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transitional
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families
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family
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,
households
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chore
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also
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were also
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dependant
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to
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on
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my mother.
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she still
need
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needs
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to spend some time
to develop
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developing
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her
part time
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part-time
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job. Because
long term
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long-term
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complains
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cause some
argue
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arguments
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between my mother and
farther
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father
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.After that, I make the analysis
to
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both
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sides with benefits and drawbacks. Luckily,they
both
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promises
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to share these jobs. Even in some countries
still
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,still
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relay
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rely
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on fermale
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fermale
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female
to afford the household chores.But that will be a
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to
action
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act
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together for household chores in the future. I believe
both
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families
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family
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members need to corporate and build harmonious
area
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to
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for
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their children and
be
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mould
to
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apply
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their little
one
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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