The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between 2003 and 2013

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between 2003 and 2013
The
Correct your spelling
This
show examples
demonstrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
demonstrates
show examples
us frequently
American
people
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
ate
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
junk
food
between 2003 and 2013. 4%
people
of in the USA consumed
junk
food
in 2003 and slightly lower in 2006 and 2013.
This
proportion
was nearly 3%.
On the other hand
,
proportion
Add an article
the proportion
show examples
of
American
people
who never consumed
junk
food
is the same as
this
Change the determiner
this person
these people
show examples
people
consumed it every day in 2003 and 4%
American
Change preposition
of American
show examples
people
never ate
junk
food
in restaurants between 2006 and 2003. In
this
bar chart, fast
food
consumption once a week
higher
Add a missing verb
was higher
show examples
33
Change preposition
by 33
show examples
% in 2006. Respectively 31% in 2003 and 27% in 2013. In
additional
Replace the word
addition
show examples
going to fast
food
restaurant
Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
show examples
once or twice a month
American
people
who
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
30% in 2003.
This
ratio decreased in 2006
that is
5% and it increased again to 33%. In 2003.
Finally
, in 2006 and 2013 the habit of eating in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
show examples
composed
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
proportion
Add an article
the proportion
a proportion
show examples
of 15%
while
in 2003,
this
proportion
of Americans who went to restaurants several times a week was between 20% and %15.
Submitted by eesra.kuzuu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words american, people, junk, food, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: