The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between 2003 and 2013

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between 2003 and 2013
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junk
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between 2003 and 2013. 4%
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of in the USA consumed
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food
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in 2003 and slightly lower in 2006 and 2013.
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was nearly 3%.
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of
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people
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who never consumed
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is the same as
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consumed it every day in 2003 and 4%
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of American
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people
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never ate
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food
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in restaurants between 2006 and 2003. In
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bar chart, fast
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consumption once a week
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% in 2006. Respectively 31% in 2003 and 27% in 2013. In
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going to fast
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restaurant
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once or twice a month
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30% in 2003.
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ratio decreased in 2006
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5% and it increased again to 33%. In 2003.
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, in 2006 and 2013 the habit of eating in
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composed
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proportion
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the proportion
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of 15%
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in 2003,
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proportion
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of Americans who went to restaurants several times a week was between 20% and %15.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words american, people, junk, food, proportion with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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