In many countries, men and women are working full time. It is therefore logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In
this
contemporary era,
women
's role has taken a shift from
traditional
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the traditional
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domain. Previously,
women
was
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only responsible to do household chores and to do upbringing of children but nowadays there is a complete shift in
her
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their
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roles and
responsibilites
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responsibilities
.
Thus
there is an extreme need to enlighten the importance of sharing domestic tasks among couples. In many ways, from nurturing children to
achieve
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career enhancement
women
of
modern
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the modern
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era got
burdend
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burdened
burden
with tremendous
responsiblities
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responsibilities
and to
confornt
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confront
these challenges she requires
a
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apply
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continous
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continuous
support
which can only be provided
through
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by
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her
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their
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spouse. To illustrate
this
further
, a man can
support
her wife by managing
houshold
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household
tasks which
considered
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are considered
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to be the duty of
women
an
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and
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provides
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providing
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support
in
multidisplined
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multidisciplined
multidiscipline
activties
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activities
which
includes
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include
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schooling
of
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children,
supporting
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and supporting
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spouse
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the spouse
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in making dinner or breakfast.
Thus
, it will
reduces
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reduce
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the sense of
responsiblity
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responsibility
on
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for
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women
and may
utlimatley
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ultimately
strengthen the relationship of the couple.
On the contrary
, if men failed to
support
her
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women
then
it will develop serious outcomes and
hence
disturbed
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the
relation
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relationship
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. As
women
are more emotional and always look for
the
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apply
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support
from
her
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their
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companion and
incase
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in case
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of ignorance it may produce serious catastrophic effects which may generate toxicity in the
relation
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relationship
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and ultimately lead to the end of any
relation
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relationship
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.
For example
, there is a significant increase in
divorce
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the divorce
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ratio has been recorded among couples who were working full time and rigid to
particpate
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participate
in domestic work. To put
in
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it in
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a nutshell,
role
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the role
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of both men and
women
has taken a contemporary shift.
Therefore
, it requires
a
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apply
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mutual effort and
support
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supports
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to counter
modern day
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modern-day
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challenges.
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