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The beat way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent to you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any examples.

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It is commonly believed by many that in order to identify different
cultures
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, ones should be employed in certain international institutes or companies. To be honest, I am of opinion that
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 is not true as we can get to know about foreign
cultures
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 in various ways, and I am going to exemplify it in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, Individuals are capable of gaining a better understanding of distinct authentic
cultures
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 by studying
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books or travelling. To put it simply, the more we make a journey to other societies, the more we could simply learn some aspects from them.
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 valuable experience would allow us to be more optimistic and flexible because we can identify the differences between
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 and customs.
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, the internet has played a crucial role in educating its users to learn more about
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cultural diversity in recent decades. In
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 way, social media platforms can
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 widen their horizons
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 to other communities around the globe, resulting in a relationship among people. When it comes to making a new friend overseas, many find it effortless and convenient in
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comparison
 to other means of learning about
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.
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, there has been an argument
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 ones should be hired to work in multicultural organisations or not. In my view, I do not agree with
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 notion since we have a myriad of
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 overseas
cultures
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 and traditions.
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, I had an opportunity to
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 a lot about Laos festivals and traditional food when I made a visit many years ago, which exposed me to surprising and memorable moments there.
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