Many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Many manufactured food and drink
products
contain a
high Correct article usage
apply
levels
of Correct the article-noun agreement
level
sugar
, which causes many health problems. specialists believe that the sugary products
prices
should increase
to encourage people
to consume less sugar
. I totally agree with this
idea.
these days eat
food or Wrong verb form
eating
drink
sugary Wrong verb form
drinking
products
increase
among people
and it causes many diseases and problems among them. increase
their Wrong verb form
Increasing
prices
is a method to avoid of
them. Change preposition
apply
this
idea has two great reasons. First of all
it leads to reduce diseases among Add a comma
,all
people
who consume sugary products
,
because to be expensive of them cause Remove the comma
apply
people
buy
Fix the infinitive
to buy
less
them owing to Correct quantifier usage
fewer
as
Change preposition
apply
an
economic aspect it doesn't economically viable Correct article usage
apply
as a result
people
consumption of sugary Change noun form
people's
products
decrease
plus some diseases Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
such
as diabetes eliminate among them and also
they less pay for healthy
issues.Replace the word
health
for example
according to
harward university research, after increasing prices
of sugary products
in United States between 1995 to 2005 , the number of people
who has diabetes decreased 15 percent
.
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per cent
in
addition
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,addition
grow
up Wrong verb form
growing
of
food or drink Change preposition
in
prices
which have much sugar
can change people
Change noun form
people's
lifestyle
. Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
this
procedure causes people
change
their eating habits and tend to consume healthy foods or drinks which have less Add the particle
to change
sugar
, therefore
it leads to increase
health and Correct article usage
a reduction
reduction
Replace the word
reduced
obesity
among Change preposition
in obesity
people
at
different Change preposition
of
age
. Fix the agreement mistake
ages
for
instance
I have a cousin who lives in Swiss. he used to buy sugary drinks a lot and it caused Add a comma
,instance
he
Correct pronoun usage
him
became
overweight. After Change the verb form
to become
that
government established a rule which increased sugary drinks price, he changed his eating habits and could decrease his weight.
in conclusion , to be expensive Correct determiner usage
the
of
sugary Change preposition
apply
products
lead to increase
health and change lifestyle
and eating habits among Change preposition
in lifestyle
people
which both of them are beneficial for individual
and Add an article
the individual
also
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