Some parents believe children's leisure activities should be always educational, but others think it will cause more pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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opines that spare
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teach something to youngsters.
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alternative people believe it will put more force on teenagers.
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essay will discuss both views. To commence with,It is very crucial for students to learn different types of academic skills and which is possible only if they use their spare
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perfectly.For ,example child who watches BBC news channel rather than watching cartoon have always greater general knowledge and which definitely help them to perform
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in academic.
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,the masses who mostly engage in solving colour
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was very good at solving mental ability
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it is important for the student to grab these skills to result in their education. Despite the fact that learning study skills
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tremendous benefits .
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, sometimes teenagers want to learn
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like painting,singing and much more other than educational activities.we should appreciate
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type of activity because many people in our country are making money more than a doctor or engineers by making
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field.,
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that spare
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be used for sports and exercise with friends
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the fact that health and socializing with others is equally important for a person.
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,we do not force our children
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ventures without having interest. In conclusion,
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using our spare
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for study
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is good enough the choice and
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interests
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of children are equally important.
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