The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
This
diagram demonstrates the rate of
men
and
women
of various
ages
and the average of physical exercises in Australia in 2010. As seen in the chart
women
who are between 45 and 54
ages
have the highest rate of doing sports with a
percentage
of 53.3
whereas
the highest exercising age of
men
is 15-24 and
this
percentage
is 52.8.
Moreover
,
men
’s
percentage
39.5 have the lowest physical activity from 35 to 44
ages
.
In addition
, the rate of
women
is 47.1 that are 65 and overages. Between 25 to 34 age participants who account for a female proportion of 48.9 are higher than males whose proportion is 42.2. 39.5% of
men
and 52.5% of
women
exercise regularly in the range of 35 to 44 years old .
Similarly
, we almost observe equal percentages between 45-54
ages
and 55-64
ages
. Relatively,
while
the 45-54
ages
of
men
group are 43.1 ,
women
are 53.3
besides
45-54
ages
of
men
group are 45.1 and
women
are 53. Compare with
women
's and
men
's participation over 65
ages
,
women
's participation are
percentage
47.1 a little bit higher than
men
's participation
percentage
of 46.7. These
ages
of
men
increase regular exercise by 2%,
on the other hand
, these
ages
of
women
decrease exercise by 0.3%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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