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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
Would it matter if your personal surrounding were organised/tidy? The
answer
 to that question will differ from one mindset to another. Not all of us like to keep our stuff in its supposed
place
, but others might see that
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. The two points will be discussed
further
 down the line with more in-depth details. Does a tidy
place
 really make any difference? Yes, that’s my simple
answer
. Having a
well organised
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place
help
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 us find what we need instantly, as it is in its spot. A key in the fob or a remote on the
couches
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 left side,
mean
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 that
these
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certain
things
 will never be lost. Assigning a
place
 for each of your stuff is important, it simply means that whenever you are done with that thing you just return it
in
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 the designated spot. What does a messy well unorganised
place
 offer? That’s a hard question to
answer
, but I will still happily
answer
 it. Having a
real
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 messy workplace/home might give us the opportunity to
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things
accidently
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accidentally
. A scientist in the 20th century once was doing long research on
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. The scientist had the most atrocious unorganised lab ever, he had his papers and experiments all over the
place
. It was so messy that there was trash everywhere. One day he walked
in
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 his lab to get some of his papers. He had a bag in his hand at the
time
. He placed the bag on the table and the papers on the table fell on the ground, when he reached for
a
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 paper
took
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 a quick look at it, he realised that the
answer
 was in front of his eyes
this
 whole
time
! After all, everyone has their own preference, but from my point of view, having a messy
place
 wins all day every day. A messy
place
 means that you don’t have to put the effort of returning
things
in
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its
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place
, that’s just a waste of
time
. A non-organised
place
 might mean you will look for your
things
 from
time
 to
time
, but that makes you find other
things
 you might have lost at some point
of
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 your miserable life. A
place
 like
that is
 what I want around me, it’s the environment I want to be in. but it is up to everyone
at
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 the end, as long as you’re happy. No one really cares
at
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 the end.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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