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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives?

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Traditions
 are frequently challenged by innovation
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 since most of them are considered
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outdated perspectives. Despite the fact that
traditions
 could play an essential role
of
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 reminding
people
 of their roots, I strongly agree that some
traditions
 should be put behind to make progress
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 the future.
Traditions
, nowadays, should take the role to introduce to the next generation the life of their ancestors,
while
people
 should learn it with critical thinking, knowing not all of them are worth to be inherited.
Traditions
 are valued by most
people
 since it contains the wisdom from ancestors to
upbring
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 their descendants, which has strong influences on local
societies
.
However
, strictly following
traditions
 could restrict the development of a society, since innovation could go against the principles of
traditions
.
For example
, the development of astronomical science makes
people
 doubt the existence of gods,
along with
 it, the activities and events
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 for pleasing gods to prevent natural disasters.
Traditions
, nowadays, are more symbolic than have practical influence
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 the majority of
societies
.
People
 kept the traditional ceremonies as a reminder of their ancestors
instead
.
For example
, some minor ethnic groups in Taiwan keep the tradition of throwing a celebration for harvest seasons despite that not many of them are farming.
To conclude
, it is inevitable that
traditions
 are crucial for maintaining
distinction
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 between
societies
,
however
, those
traditions
 should not cause restrictions for the world making progress. In my perspective,
traditions
 should take the place
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 a reminder of the past with no practical influence on modern
societies
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heritage
  • continuity
  • progress
  • innovative
  • cultures
  • societal advances
  • integration
  • cultural tapestry
  • ideologies
  • reconciled
  • evolved
  • adapted
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