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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The schemes below give information about
airport
 departure nowadays and how it should look in the future after renovation next year. To start with, right now departure is divided into two parts. The first part is on the left
is
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for people who are going to leave the
airport
. There is located check-in desk on the left side.
Hence
 , in the right corner is located a small restaurant. Next , passport control and security.
Then
, people get into a launch zone where they should for
wait
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 their flights .
Also
, there are 6 gates and a walkway which is located on the left side. In the second part of the
airport
 for arrivals there are fewer facilities compared with the left side. At that place only passport control and customs. The plan for the new airfield
have
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 significant changes. In the departures
zone
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 there were swapped locations of the cafe and check-in desk and was added bag drop.
Furthermore
, after people go through passport control and security they can get into shops.
In addition
, the walkway was changed on the sky train.
Also
, gates have doubled and now they are eighteenth. In the
arrivals
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 zone were added some the facilities like coffee , ATM and a place where individuals can hire cars. In conclusion, the future
airport
 will have considerable changes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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