People doing dangerous sporting activities like scuba-diving and bungee-jumping should be responsible for their own safety. Rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing those sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
contemporary world, it is undoubtedly true that risky sports are getting more popular. One school of thought opines that
person
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doing risky sports like
bungee-jumping
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and
scuba-diving
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should be done at their own
risks
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.
People
working as rescuers can not
risk
their
life
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for other
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enjoyment. I firmly agree with the laid statement and
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reasons
for inclination are articulated in
further
paragraphs. To embark with, there
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number
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of reasons, supporting my ideology out of
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the strongest one is that
people
should
risk
and have safety their own
life
by not depending on others like rescuers to help or save them by doing
such
dangerous activities.
Rescue
people
have their own
life
and they
risk
it for other
people
just for some sum of money.
For instance
, if something goes wrong
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rescue
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person everybody is going to blame him for their mistake. On the
flipside
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, there are
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people
advocating the opposite
view-point
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. The first and foremost reason is that
rescue
people
shoulb
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should
be
their
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because if a person is doing it
first
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time they can help them with it and
people
will get confidence
for
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performing
such
sporting activities
by
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the presence of
rescue
workers.
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people
can
risk
their
life
for sake of the
people
and their
family
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too. Agglomerating all the points, I hereby again favour my perception that
people
should
risk
their
life
by
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their own
risk
and not
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on
rescue
persons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrinsic risks
  • rigorous training
  • ethical duty
  • thrill-seeking behaviors
  • high-risk activities
  • rescue operations
  • emotional toll
  • financial burden
  • safety standards
  • regulations
  • innovation
  • technology-enhanced safety
  • personal responsibility
  • adventure sports
  • extreme sports
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