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People doing dangerous sporting activities like scuba-diving and bungee-jumping should be responsible for their own safety. Rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing those sports. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #activities #safety #rescue #workers #risk #lives #sports
In
this
 contemporary world, it is undoubtedly true that risky sports are getting more popular. One school of thought opines that
person
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people
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 doing risky sports like
bungee-jumping
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bungee jumping
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 and
scuba-diving
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scuba diving
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 should be done at their own
risks
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risk
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.
People
 working as rescuers can not
risk
 their
life
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lives
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 for other
people
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 enjoyment. I firmly agree with the laid statement and
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resons
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reasons
 for inclination are articulated in
further
 paragraphs. To embark with, there
are
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number
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 of reasons, supporting my ideology out of
all
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the strongest one is that
people
 should
risk
 and have safety their own
life
 by not depending on others like rescuers to help or save them by doing
such
 dangerous activities.
Rescue
people
 have their own
life
 and they
risk
 it for other
people
 just for some sum of money.
For instance
, if something goes wrong
by
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rescue
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 person everybody is going to blame him for their mistake. On the
flipside
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, there are
less
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people
 advocating the opposite
view-point
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viewpoint
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. The first and foremost reason is that
rescue
people
shoulb
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should
 be
their
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there
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 because if a person is doing it
first
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the first
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 time they can help them with it and
people
 will get confidence
for
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in
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 performing
such
 sporting activities
by
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 the presence of
rescue
 workers.
Rescue
people
 can
risk
 their
life
 for sake of the
people
 and their
family
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families
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 too. Agglomerating all the points, I hereby again favour my perception that
people
 should
risk
 their
life
by
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at
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 their own
risk
 and not
depending
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 on
rescue
 persons.
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