e diagram below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the main information and make comparison where relevant.
e diagram provides information about the process of frozen fish pies.
Overall
, it can be seen, there have 20 steps
in the picture.
To being with, the first picture shows us the delivery of potatoes
by truck for more than one month. Second, the line gives steps
of how to prepare potatoes
in seven steps
namely clean, peel, slice, boil, chill, store and warp in the bag.
In addition
, in other ,lines it can be seen that salmon
and potatoes
come in two different ways. Also
, salmon
only take 12 months or less for delivery. Moreover
, there have seven steps
similar to potatoes
first step is called lemon juice and then
put salt into the salmon
. The next step is
to steam the salmon
in the oven after that check the skin and bones by
the inspector and prepare peas and sauce.
Change preposition
of
However
, both product
go Change to a plural noun
products
to
the same line process for freeze and Change preposition
through
prepare
for sale in the store.Replace the word
preparation
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