e diagram below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the main information and make comparison where relevant.

e diagram below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the main information and make comparison where relevant.
e diagram provides information about the process of frozen fish pies.
Overall
, it can be seen, there have 20
steps
in the picture. To being with, the first picture shows us the delivery of
potatoes
by truck for more than one month. Second, the line gives
steps
of how to prepare
potatoes
in seven
steps
namely clean, peel, slice, boil, chill, store and warp in the bag.
In addition
, in other ,lines it can be seen that
salmon
and
potatoes
come in two different ways.
Also
,
salmon
only take 12 months or less for delivery.
Moreover
, there have seven
steps
similar to
potatoes
first step is called lemon juice and
then
put salt into the
salmon
.
The next step is
to steam the
salmon
in the oven after that check the skin and bones
by
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of
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the inspector and prepare peas and sauce.
However
, both
product
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products
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go
to
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through
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the same line process for freeze and
prepare
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preparation
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for sale in the store.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words steps, potatoes, salmon with synonyms.
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