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Write a letter to your internet service provider to complain. In the letter:  Describe the problem and why you are unhappy  Arrange for an engineer to visit your home  Request a reduction in your bill

#internet #service #provider #engineer #visit #home #request #reduction #bill
Dear Mr Kevin, I am writing to bring your attention to the issue I
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 facing with the internet speed of your service provider for the
last
 15 days.
Firstly
, I sent an email to your technician to repair the speed problem
last
 week. He tried to fix it but was not successful. I am a remote employer of an organization, I
must
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need high speed in order to complete the company's tasks. But, unfortunately, I am really frustrated about your service.
Secondly
, I would like you to send a professional engineer to solve
this
 complication. What I understood from your technician is that the trouble is not only in the dish frequency but
also
 in the receiver. Let your engineer call me to guide him to my house location.
Finally
, As you now know
that
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this
 issue
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 going on for 15 days, I would like to request to send the bill deducting these days from the month only after fixing the problem. Because I am using alternative sources on the internet in order to continue my work. waiting for your kind response. Yours sincerely, Mandeep Singh
Submitted by mandeepsinghsony2022 on

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task response
The letter effectively describes the problem faced with the internet service provider and requests for an engineer visit and reduction in the bill. However, it needs to include more specific details about the internet speed issue and the previous correspondence with the service provider.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is clear, and the greeting and closing are appropriate. However, it would benefit from organizing the content into more distinct paragraphs to enhance cohesion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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