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The best way to solve the traffic congestion in the city is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When the cities build and design, every civil
engineers
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 and
achitecture
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architecture
architectural
 put all intention to solve traffic
jam
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throught
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through
throughout
 the city.
However
 ,it seems not to
easily
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 completed with the problem.
Although
,
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 governments encourage the using
transport
 ,
instead
using
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the
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private car, systematic errors always happen
to
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 our daily life. I disagree
the
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 solution which providing free public
transport
in
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at
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 any
time
 would be not
good
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 alternative. There are mainly two reasons
of
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why it couldn't succeed.
First
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 of one,
expense
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the expense
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 of
maintaing
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maintaining
 the system of
transport
 has consumed with enormously. There need more
times
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time
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of
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 employees, supplements,and electricity.if there are no people using the
transport
 at night ,costs waste inevitably.
Second,
it's not a problem of the
time
 making
utillize
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utilize
 at night.
For example
,
Time
 for finishing work and back
to
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home is
extremly
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extremely
 crowded and cars are trapped
in
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on
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 the road. It might be
problem
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a problem
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of
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number
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 of
lane
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 limiting
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access.
On the other hand
, some cities where are mobility to commute highly even in
late
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the late
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 night need a
transport
 running in all day .
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in
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efficiently is
nessearily
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necessarily
 to commute . Most
commuter
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commuters
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 don't want to
consum
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consume
the
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time
 on the road.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • mass transit systems
  • traffic flow
  • rush hour
  • vehicle emissions
  • sustainable transportation
  • infrastructure development
  • commuter habits
  • overcrowding issues
  • public funding
  • quality of service
  • economic feasibility
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • accessibility
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