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Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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In these years,
everythings
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everything
 is changing more and more. Some individuals find out
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become
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becoming
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success
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 is
change
 and
get
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getting
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 new
experiences
. But others prefer their
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houses and have a negative attitude towards
change
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changing
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 their lifestyles. In
this
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 I will discuss both views and say why I agree with
change
. Changes are an integral part of our lives nowadays. If we have a positive outlook on new
experiences
, we will
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high chance to have a happy and balanced
life
. There is no denying the fact that
life
 without
change
 can be harmful and
leads
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lead
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 to depression and
boring
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. We need to experience new
feeling
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feelings
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, for
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 we
go
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travel to a new place, we see new things, foods and people and learn more to
improving
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our
life
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lives
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 to be happier than past.
Furthermore
, new
experiences
 often open new windows to be successful. We can review the decisions which are made,
for instance
 in our job,
clearly
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clearly,
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 we understand that we had the power
overcome
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to overcome
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 our fears and now we gain more money and pleasure.
On the other hand
, stability
are
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 more desirable for some individuals. Some people like to be in their comfort zone and don’t want to take new
risk
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risks
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.
For example
, they have a family and responsibility and changes would be risky for them. They
prefer
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 live in
a
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the
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 same house and do
same
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 job. It seems to me that
they
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they are
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 just afraid to lose something they already have.
To sum up
, I believe that
experiences
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experiencing
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 all aspects of
life
 is more important than
have
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having
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a
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an
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 unrisky
life
.
However
, it should be considered to learn how to balance stability with changes.
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