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The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals who showed their interest in movies, which they visited in three different
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 in a week.
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, it is immediately apparent from the chart that the highest figure of people prefer to watch movies in the Cinema on weekends, Saturdays and Sundays,
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 the maximum number of individuals watch a movie on Weekdays. In detail, a community that likes to watch films on Monday began at 10% in 2003, but
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 proportion increased to nearly 14% after two
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 and significantly downgraded to 13% in the final year.
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, 20% of the nation visited theatre on Tuesday, but
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 ratio declined by 4% in 2005 and soared to 17% in 2007. Next on Wednesday,
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 scale was different; approximately 50% of the crowd watched movies, and
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 value plummeted to below 10% in 2007. Interestingly, they watched a movie in the Cinema on Friday, which accounted for 30% over three
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. Still,
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 statistic changed near the weekend, and the value skyrocketed to 40% on 2003 Saturday. Afterwards,
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 sum peaked at 45% after two
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, but
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 ratio plunged to 42% in the final year.
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, Sunday had the lowest number compared to Saturday which was 30% of people who visited the Cinema in 2003 and
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 value climbed slightly to nearly 32% in 2007.

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