You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart shows some changes in the percentage of people who were born in
Australia
and who were born outside
Australia
in cities, rural and towns from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, living cities had got the highest level of percentages of all, which is over 50% in any countries.
In addition
, the number probability had gone up in 2010.
Although
when it comes to people who reside in rural areas, there is a significant difference between 1995 and 2010. Let's dive into it. In 1995, in
Australia
, there are about 30 % of residents stayed in , and even ,more
40
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than 40
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% of citizens who were born outside of
Australia
lived in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
Whereas
in 2010, it declined to 17% who live in the outskirts, especially outside of
Australia
only 5%. At
last
, the percentage of people living in towns is gradually decreasing in either of the years.
To sum up
, ethnic groups tend to like living in cities rather than villages or rural communities.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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