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your English speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport write an email to your friend. in your email recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn explain how your friend could learn this sport suggest that you both learn this sport together

#english #friend #lives #town #advice #sport #email
Dear Kevin, Hope
this
 email finds you well. I am writing
this
 email to recommend
you
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 an extremely exciting sport which I have been doing for a couple of years, Snowboarding. Mentioning its merits, not only is snowboarding extremely fun, but
also
 it is thoroughly physically challenging.
Moreover
, one can benefit from the fresh air and marvellous views of snow-covered slopes of ski resorts and to make a long story short, words cannot express how beautiful those slopes are.
Furthermore
, one can learn snowboarding quickly, as most people learn to keep their balance
over board
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 in
few
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 sessions. Needless to say, a professional instructor can help you through your learning curve and speed up your progress, leading to more joy
while
 you are in a resort.
Also
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 you can count on me for starting
this
 sport. As I am familiar with the routines of buying tickets and checking the weather conditions, I can help you with these.
Additionally
, we can both have a session with Jon, a friend of mine who won several gold medals
last
 year. He is a great instructor;
however
, his private sessions are pretty expensive which we can share though, have no worries about that. And
finally
, I do look forward to seeing you on the slopes. Bests, Nariman
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